hoshi_no_koe ([info]hoshi_no_koe) wrote,
@ 2004-08-04 19:26:00
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Current mood: drained

Title: Untitled
Type: Fanfic
Genre: Angst, I guess.
Disclaimer: Characters don't belong to me.
Word count: 1053

A Tenjou Tenge fanfic for [info]beckymarie, because she wanted TjTg fanfic and who am I to deny her? ^__~ Besides, this fic was born from the questions she was asking about the series (or more specifically the Takayanagi family). Untitled, because I can't think of one. Suggestions please?

This is from Mitsuomi's PoV because he was the one who kicked his father out of the house. He was the one who killed Shin. He's at the center of becky's questions. So.

I don't think I got his personality down well... Part of the problem comes from the fact that he was so unbelievably different before. Before what, I can't really say, because there isn't a specific incident. There wasn't a final straw that broke the camel's back. It's like, at the hospital he was still the younger, gentle Mitsuomi and then when he appeared at the school battle (forgot what it's called ^^;) the next day he was already Mr Ice Cube. Then he steps out of the stadium and collapses into Mana's arms and you see an exhausted, gentler Mitsuomi who's so hurt and raw. Difficult to write, so I just settled for a rather stiff tone of voice which totally drained me. More then a thousand word. Yippee, my longest fanfic to date. I've read through it a couple of times, but it isn't making sense to me anymore... I'll edit it again, when I'm in the mood to. Heh.

Edited: Oh and spoiler warnings for all who haven't read the manga.

Until then...

 

"Gentle? Me?" I had laughed. "You'd be even more surprised by my younger brother, Mana-san," I had told her, a long time ago, before things had gotten out of control.

How true that was.

Masataka was gentle. I remember the first time I saw Masataka walk. "Onii-san!" he had burbled cheerfully as he made his way into my open arms. Such a trusting, beautiful child. I, who was still a toddler myself at that time, had always behaved like I was much older wherever Masataka was concerned. The protector. The saviour. I was the elder son, I was to inherit everything the Takayanagi name stood for. I had to uphold everything, not just for my family, nor the Twelve Families, but for everyone I knew. That had been pounded into my young mind before I was old enough to understand what it meant. I was the Takayanagi scion, and that was it. Masataka should have been spared. He could have led as normal and peaceful a life as one from the Takayanagi main family could live, until I lost my life. Masataka will have take over when I finally die, and I have a duty to make sure Masataka will be ready. Masataka's gentleness has made him weak. I have to kill it, just as Shin had killed mine.

Ah, Shin... How can I even begin to describe the time together with Shin? The time I spent in Team Katana had been mostly idyllic. Even at the end of Team Katana, I had still held this fascination with Shin, strengthened by Maya's presence. Both the elder Natsume siblings had had an aura around them, a strength that had drawn me towards them, as helpless as a moth attracted to the light of a raging bonfire. It had, strangely enough, blinded me temporarily to the responsibilities I held, despite Shin's constant reminders about power and status. "Ah," I had probably subconsciously thought, "I'm still young. I have time. I love Shin and Maya. The family and my responsibilities can wait."

Then it happened. My father, my old, foolish father had finally pushed Shin too far. He should never, ever have had Maya tricked, beaten and raped. He wanted Shin to go mad. He wanted Shin to completely lose control. He wanted Shin to turn into the monster he had been desperately trying to suppress. My father knew of Shin's feelings for Maya. Everyone did. No one who ever hurt Maya would be spared from his wrath. My father had a plan to bring darkness down upon us, so that the True Warrior would emerge. Everyone though it would be me, but we'll never find out if they were right. Shin is dead now, killed. Not by me, as I have let Maya believe, but my father. He was the one who set Shin on the accelerated path to destruction. I was simply trying to salvage the situation, but Maya will never believe me. Let her hate me. That hate is useful to me. My old, foolish father. I should have been around to stop him. That I was too young is no excuse. That it was beyond my control too, is false. There were so many warning signs, but caught up in the tangled web of Maya's confusion, and mine, I ignored them. I chose not to see them.

That fatal fight with Shin was my way of tying up a loose end. It had to be brutal. There had to be no doubt at all that I was stronger then Shin, if I were to take over the Enforcement group and use it's powers. I had already decided my father had to go. He would never willingly step down, so I had to remove him by force. He had told me before, mockingly, "You are inefficient." I felt no pleasure when I threw the words back in his face, watching him crumble, only anger at what he had put Maya through. It was also painful for me... Because I had to make Masataka leave too. He had to grow. Had I kept him with me, he would remain the gentle, silly boy he was when he was still a child. He would never have grown strong enough to take over my position as head of the Takayanagi Group when I finally die. He had to grow up if he was to survive. I was secretly pleased to hear Maya had taken over the Jyuukenbu, and even more so when I heard Masataka had been taken under her wing. I don't think there is anyone else more suitable to bring him to maturity, and to have the woman I love taking care of him seems to me a fitting irony. Having Masataka live with our father... It will be a good lesson for him. There is no place for weaklings at the head of the Takayanagi Group, and what better way for him to learn then to live with one who has been ousted? I wonder if he has realised this yet. He will be the head of the family someday, and that day will come soon. He has to be ready by then.

Many people have called me cold and callous, but those people are ignorant. My father had no right to play god, to put innocents through the hell he created. It was poetic justice when it blew up in his face. The hell he created would not have been satisfied with just his life, and it was my responsibility to stop it. I am the head of the Takayanagi Group. I am a warrior. I have my responsibilities, and I will not abandon them again. I have learnt my lesson at a very high cost, paid by myself and others around me. It will not be in vain. I will not let Masataka have someone do to him what I had to do to our father.

He will understand why I had to do what I did someday. I trust that he will. He does, afterall, bear the Takayanagi family name. He is stronger then he thinks he is. The blood that flows through his veins is in no way inferior to that which flows through the demon exorcist's. He will understand, and succeed where our father and I have failed.




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[info]beckymarie
2004-08-07 06:05 am UTC (link)
You know what I love about fanfic? That a lot of times it can explain a situation to me in such a way that I think I finally understand WTF Mitsuomi is trying to do. The way you had him still caring about Maya and Masataka is lovely, because you can see hints of it, the way he reacts to them, but he's not a sap about it. So this fic hit all the right buttons for me, because it works with what we've been shown and I GET why he's doing what he's doing.

Masataka will have take over when I finally die, and I have a duty to make sure Masataka will be ready. Masataka's gentleness has made him weak. I have to kill it, just as Shin had killed mine.

These lines especially just... brought the entire character and his relationships with the people he cares about home for me. I really am a little bit flail-y over the fic because... just... wheeeee, Takayanagi angst and caring without being fluffy or sappy or OOC. I actually could hear Mitsuomi's voice while I was reading, especially that... there's a little bit of anger there, but not really. He's very calm, for the most part, and very determined, which is the exact tone a story like this needed.

I really liked this a lot. ♥

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-08-07 12:04 pm UTC (link)
T___T i managed to get mitsuomi's characterization right afterall? *sob* you just made my day haha glad you liked it *grin*

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[info]mica_chan
2004-09-02 11:46 am UTC (link)
I liked your story....and your explanation fits with what I think about Mitsuomi and all.
Actually...I've been thinking for a while that Masataka (I'm not used to call Takayanagi by his first name)is the 'True Warrior' of Tenjou Tenge. Even though he doesn't appear so much during all the story, there are a lot of hints that says that everything Mitsuomi did was because there was something about his brother that nobody really knows.

I'm just...I've finished read chapter 77 of the manga (Oh! And I could see Maya saying that she don't want to loose Mitsuomi again...sooo cute ^_^ I love those two) and as always I'm confused about a lot of things...as the reasons behind Souhaku...what's Souichirou real place in this story, and more important to me...what will happen to Mitsuomi and Maya..not just as lovers, but as person.

And a little doubt....Mitsuomi doesn't have much time of life, right? I mean, did I understand wrong or since two years ago his life time is delimited? (geez..I forgot the word in English, I'm sorry)

But again, I'm very happy with your fic, because it's the firs Tenjou Tenge fic I've read and I was looking for some for ages! ^_^

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-09-02 11:41 pm UTC (link)
Souhaku...? I don't remember reading that... I've got a really bad memory ^^; What's Souhaku?

Souichirou's purpose will be revealed in due time, I think. Right now it's all concentrated on the Takayanagi and Natsume family, but Souichirou is important, because of his family bloodline and all... Plus he is the main character afterall, so his purpose will be revealed. In the manga-ka's time haha

Yep Mitsuomi's life span is limited. How limited we really don't know... Just that he was killed by Shin 2 years ago. He just hasn't died yet... (whatever Maya meant by that =P)

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[info]mica_chan
2004-09-03 04:41 am UTC (link)
IF I'm not wrong, Souhaku is the name (or title, I don't know) of Nagi's father. Kago Souhaku...I think.

Yeah, yeah..I kown that Souichirou is the main character (unfortunatly...because..I don't know...I like him, but not so much to like the idea of him as the main character), and I never had any doubts about some good purpose to hime, but...I still have the feeling that Takayanagi (Masataka) is the person in the 'center' of everything. I mean, he isn't the main character....he almost doesn't appear (I gave thanks to God because he finally had some space in volume 12...actually, Mitsuomi is other that never shows up. Geeez! Why can't I have a favorite character that is the main character?), but 'that' feeling that everything is happening because of him is still inside me. I can't explain this sensation, it just exist.

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-09-03 05:38 am UTC (link)
I didn't like Souichirou in the beginning either... But when he unlocked the dragon's power something just went *thump* inside me and... well... I quite like him now ^^; Not my favourite character, but still...

Geeez! Why can't I have a favorite character that is the main character?

My favourite character's dead. *sniffle*

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[info]mica_chan
2004-09-03 07:03 am UTC (link)
My favourite character's dead. *sniffle*

You also liked Shin?? My friend used to like him so much that when he died she couldn't continue to read TT.
Thanks God my favorite character has been Mitsuomi since the very first beginning ^_^

About Souichiro...as I said, I don't dislike him. Actually, I like the guy...I liked since the beginning, but...I don't know, there is something lacking in him to be someone in my top list. And I'm always afraid of this...'feeling' that he has for Maya. I hate the idea of Nagi and Maya together. I want Maya with Mitsuomi...I want Nagi with Aya (even thought I love Aya with Takayanagi too...oh, God! I even like Takayanagi with Maya!!! I don't deserve to live -_-)...but I like the development of Nagi's character. He grow up a lot since his first appearance, don't you thing?

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-09-03 07:48 am UTC (link)
I love Shin T__T

I liked the fact that Nagi likes Maya. I thought it was a really, really unexpected, very interesting twist in the story. Quite frankly, I don't like Aya. I really, really dislike her. She's irritating, brainless, a complete ditz and just so undeserving of the Ryuugan. I don't want Masataka with her... I like the idea of Masataka getting together with that girl, I can't remember her name. The one who fought with him in school, and burnt up her clothes? The sweet princess-y girl from F, if i remember correctly.

Yep Souichirou has grown up a lot =) [I keep thinking of him as Souichirou, but Nagi is so much easier to spell... ~__~]

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[info]mica_chan
2004-09-03 08:02 am UTC (link)
I noticed we have totally diferent tastes ^_^

I liked the fact that Nagi likes Maya. I thought it was a really, really unexpected, very interesting twist in the story.

I thought it was so obvious that when it finally happen I wanted to kill Oh! Great.
Since the beginning of the story I knew Nagi would like Maya...my worries is that she likes him too. (if he does it, I swear, I'll go all the way to Japan to kill Oh! Great).

Quite frankly, I don't like Aya. I really, really dislike her.

I understand the felling....because I HATE Maya. I like Aya though. I think she grew a lot as a charater and as a person too (of course, also as a warrior)
Maya...geeez...I disliked her since I first saw the girl. Her personality, her stuborness, her...I don't know. I just can't like the girl. (the only moments I like her is when she's with Mitsuomi...that's whay I hate the idea even more that Nagi likes her and she maybe can like him back).

I like the idea of Masataka getting together with that girl, I can't remember her name.

Madoka.
Even though I didn't like the littel girl very much, I think she's ok with him. But he likes Aya so much....it's sad to see him suffering for her and she suffering for Nagi..that's suffering for Maya...that's suffering for Mitsuomi...that love her back.

Yep Souichirou has grown up a lot =) [I keep thinking of him as Souichirou, but Nagi is so much easier to spell... ~__~]

That's why I write Nagi most of the time ~_^
As I said, he has grown up a lot...and Aya too. She isn't the same person of the beginning.
I think the only character of this group that I don't like very much (aside Maya) is Bob. I don't know...I don't like his personality too much.

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-09-03 08:08 am UTC (link)
I thought it was so obvious that when it finally happen I wanted to kill Oh! Great.

Wha...? Even Bob thought Souichirou would like Aya. Plus there wasn't even much Maya/Souichirou interaction, how'd you know he'd like her???

I disliked her since I first saw the girl. Her personality, her stuborness, her...I don't know. I just can't like the girl

She worked hard to get to where she is today. She worked so hard to become strong. She wasn't born with the special powers the others had, yet she isn't bitter about it. She accepts it and that has enabled her to become strong. How can you not like Maya....? And Aya... Masataka likes her so much and all she can do is go round squealing "Souichirou-samaaaaaaaa!!! <3" Poor Masataka is so sidelined. T___T

Oh well. To each her own ^^

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[info]amano_hyo
2004-08-08 12:17 pm UTC (link)
I liked this point of view. I patricularly liked Mitsuomi's thoughts on Masataka.

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-08-09 12:49 am UTC (link)
Yay thanks ^^

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[info]thomasvye
2004-08-08 03:05 pm UTC (link)
Well *I* like it that you got how much he still loves Maya (that scene in the anime with Emi and Mistsuomi outside the loos at the bowling alley is a heartbreaker...). I really enjoyed this. Very cool.

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[info]hoshi_no_koe
2004-08-09 12:27 am UTC (link)
Thank you! ^^ I was pretty worried that Mitsuomi might've appeared a bit.. I dunno. Out of character. Heh.

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